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Good: _I am told_ that he could not under any circuling sentences

Poor: The students often gathered to watch the practice of the teaement excluded almost all, and only a feho had influence were allowed to enter, and this favoritisust, so that the students were reluctant to support the team, and lost most of their interest, a fact which had a bad effect on the athletics of the institution

3 Unite into one sentence short sentences and clauses that are closely and logically connected with one another

Bad: That it is a good school is not without proof Its diploood school is not without proof, for its diploes

Good: That its diploood school

Bad: This fact was true of all of us With the exception of John

Good: This fact was true of all of us, with the exception of John

Bad: Edward came But John never appeared

Good: Edward came, but John never appeared

Bad: The town has two railroads running through it Also, three trolley lines

Good: The town has two railroads running through it, and also three trolley lines

Good: The town has two railroads and three trolley lines running through it

4 Do not change the point of view

Bad: _We_ completed our themes, and _they_ were handed in to the teacher (In the first part of the sentence, the subject is _we_; in the second it is _themes_) Good: We completed our themes and handed them in to the teacher

Good: Our themes were coe_ took us to the foot of the hill, and _alked from there to the top, where _our friends_ met us

Good: _We_ were taken to the foot of the hill by the stage, and _alked from there to the top, where _ere met by our friends

EXERCISE 67

_Revise such of the following sentences as violate the principles of unity:_

1 I frequently had ridden on a bicycle, and though the first ride made me stiff, I felt little inconvenience afterwards

2 Of the firm Jones & Shly dishonest

3 John had plenty of energy and ambition And it is hard to understand why he didn't succeed

4 I have taken thorough courses in history in both grade school and high school, and I also worked on the farm in the summer

5 In the East the people are conservative But, in the West, they are radical and progressive

6 The news cao, and that we could go to Seattle and back for fifty dollars, and so, when our checks carips and started on a trip which was so long and eventful, but as enjoyable as any two ave us an experience that was very valuable in our work, which we took up on our return in the fall

7 The town has a fine public library, besides there are a number of steel mills

8 One may reach Boston in tays Either by water or by rail