Chapter 91 - Chapter 91: Chapter 90 How do you know the factory area so well? (Please subscribe for the first time!) (2/2)

“Brother, I really want to see you,” she said.

“We’ve been in love for a month now, brother, when will you come to see me?”

“Chu Sheng replied, ‘I just sacked the boss this week, and as soon as I get my salary, I’ll come to see you.’

‘Brother, it’s my fault you lost your job,’ said his online girlfriend with an innocent tone.

‘Chu Sheng’s face was filled with smiles, feeling that it was all worth it.’

‘He had been single for twenty-three years, hadn’t gone to college, and had been working on screws in a factory for six years, where none of the girls showed any interest in him or even wanted to talk to him.’

‘Only this girl online, calling him “brother” over and over, made his heart burst with joy.’

‘So, Chu Sheng decided to pack his bags and go find his online girlfriend.’

‘Even if she was abroad!’

‘…’

Having finished the opening, Lin Chuan briefly skimmed the outline again and gave Old Wang a thumbs-up, “This opening is good, and there are no issues with the outline direction. Chu Sheng seeking a real-life meeting because of an online romance only to be sold into a factory as a scammer, I really like this perspective.”

A glint of restored confidence appeared in Old Wang’s eyes.

“However,”

Lin Chuan changed the subject, “since Chu Sheng is a scammer, your main plot should revolve around his actions to develop the storyline, which is also the most difficult part to write.”

“Right.”

Old Wang agreed deeply, “I have never worked in that field, so I often struggle with this part, it just doesn’t feel real enough.”

Anti-scam novels must make readers feel the reality, put themselves in the shoes of the characters, and resonate with them to expose and warn against scams.

If many aspects aren’t handled properly, readers will find it jarring.

“Old Lin, can you point out specifically where there are problems?”

Old Wang was very open-minded now, eager for Lin Chuan’s advice.

Lin Chuan smiled and pointed to a certain part of the opening:

“This description here is a bit off. In fact, in the factory areas, there are supermarkets and consumer zones, but the prices are very high, usually four to five times that of the outside.”

“Generally, factories give new people a few thousand yuan for living expenses, some don’t, forcing them to meet sales targets to earn commissions.”

Old Wang frowned, “What if they don’t meet the targets? Wouldn’t they starve to death?”

A reminiscent expression appeared on Lin Chuan’s face, “For such people, the factory usually beats them up. If they don’t cooperate multiple times, they are sold to another factory. As for food, it depends on whether their family sends money. If not, they can only eat swill.”

Hissss.

Old Wang’s brow furrowed deeply, “Is that even fit for human consumption?”

“Heh, some bosses are disgusting. They mix liquid waste into the swill, forcing those who didn’t meet the targets to eat it,” Lin Chuan said.

All at once,

Old Wang felt nauseous, his face showing disgust, “Damn! They have no humanity!”

“In the factory area, it’s not about humanity, it’s about profit,” Lin Chuan said with a smile.

Old Wang took several deep breaths and continued, “Are there other issues in the book?”

Lin Chuan pointed to another section, smiling, “The scam described here seems implausible to me.”

Old Wang was taken aback, “Please enlighten me.”

After thinking a bit, Lin Chuan explained:

“Internet fraud takes many forms, including telephone scams, order brushing, video chatting, game trading, gambling, private funds, and so on.”

“In the book, the factory where Chu Sheng works mainly engages in private fund scams. For this type, a scammer needs to package himself first. For instance, he could pretend to be a high-ranking executive of a foreign company, show off luxury cars and beautiful people on social media, add some celebrities to cash in on their influence to substantiate his executive status. Doing so, he’d hook his targets much more easily.”

Old Wang pondered, “The Chu Sheng I set up didn’t go to college and isn’t good at English, pretending to be a foreign executive might be difficult.”

Lin Chuan smiled, “They have all sorts of equipment in the factories, translation devices, voice changers, those are the most basic.”

Wang Zikai’s eyes lit up, “That’s a good method!”

Suddenly

Old Wang turned to Lin Chuan and asked with a frown, “How do you know so much about factory areas?”