-1 Pato Correction (1/2)
First of all, this is an auxiliary chapter correcting some of my errors!
New Readers? Skip it. You don't really need to read this chapter.
Now, for old readers, why did I have to post this chapter?
Well, personally, I love constructive criticism from readers where they point out my errors in logic or what I am not doing right. There was this great kind hearted reader named ”Pato” on Royal Road, who helped me by taking out enough time to give advice to me on a whole bunch of things I could have done better. That is why, I didn't post a chapter yesterday. I read all my chapters again.
I have now re-edited a lot of them. I changed a lot of things, so I am making a list of all the changes in this chapter so that you don't have to go and re-read.
In Prologue:
Also, hundred years in the future, Computer Science has changed. There are no more real programmers. That is the job of AIs, Ahan was doing B.E in Virtual Reality.
These changes were what I had already planned to make!
In Chapter One- New God Maugus:
Pato Corrections begins. He pointed out there was no explanation of Ahan's skills as a God.
Why he was able to travel between two different worlds? I also realized that I made him just wave his goddamned shining hands with white light with no explanation and BAM! He was in the other world. So, this what I have changed in the first chapter:
”He fought them both, so that all the races of this world could take their fate in their own hands, whether they destroy themselves, or continue to prosper. He lost in this war of faith, and reincarnated as Ahan in the other world called Earth, to save his life. Though, apparently this disaster came as a blessing in disguise.
As now his Earthling body was imbued with all the divinity of his previous body of a god from this world. His unprecedented situation granted him an ability that no God in this world would ever possess; the ability to be able to travel through the void between two different worlds without losing himself in the process or suffering from the suppression of the will of the other world.
As a god from a different world, if he entered another world he would inevitably have to face suppression from the will of that world! But, now he had a body of an Earthling which had a soul from the Other world. Technically, he was an anomaly who belonged to both worlds.
This loophole granted him abilities which were beyond the imagination of all the Gods of this world. Though, now that he was back in this world, his Divine Kingdom was shattering and on the verge of destruction and the divinity that he had been imbued with was already borderline unstable, to the point where after a while he might not even be able to maintain his form and die.”
The white shining light signified the use of Divinity in my mind. So, to the next chapter!
In Chapter Two- Game Development:
Pato also gave a lot of suggestions on how I could have improved the Game Development chapter.
1. How the readers could get a feel for how much time and effort was spent creating this framework in order to allow the souls of players from Earth to be transported to and from the Mortal World?
2. What is a battle server? How I should explain the meaning behind my made-up term!
3. How my players should not have infinite re-spawning anymore.
Quoting Pato: ”Ahan must recoup the energy spent respawning them somehow.”
So after applying his suggestions, I have made the following changes:
”What is a battle system, you would ask? Well, the entire gaming company he was about to make would have only one person; him!
A battle server was something like a cloud-based server-hosting service that was specifically tailored for his fake VR game by his faith energy. As he could neither afford to purchase nor maintain his own server bank, he would conveniently use his faith energy to do it!”
Another change:
”But, after dying, the players would have to pay the cost of their re-spawn corresponding to their level and they would have to face a two hour time-span for re-spawning, so that when their souls return to their rightful bodies, there are no permanent side-effects to their mind.
Ahan was also unable to infinitely re-spawn the players so he decided to adopt this method of taking a corresponding amount of faith coins to their level to re-spawn. The amount of faith coins needed for re-spawning would be so significant that the players would dread dying and would be more careful. This way Ahan could avoid having to re-spawn them again and again to a particular point.”
Another change:
”The image was a square formation with an Om(Aum) symbol on the inside in the other world's calligraphy, making it look extremely mysterious. With this, when the player download his game, the content of the fake game will be sent to the virtual reality headset of the player. Then, the image of the formation with the symbol of Om will automatically appear in the soul of the player, branding him/her and their spirit will be sucked into the battle server.
In the battle server, the soul of the players will be imbued with a tinge of his faith energy, which would make their souls, technically, a native of The Mortal World as well. The souls of players, once branded and imbued with a tinge of his faith energy, would be able to travel through the void between the two worlds without losing themselves in the process.